Allbooks Review September 2011 Newsletter

Anthony Lund has a new baby daughter, Amelia
Bob Medak has a new home in West Virginia
Pete Klein has a new home
Cheryl Heinrichs celebrated a birthday
Shirley A. Roe’s, Dreams and Nightmares received a Bronze Award from Reader’s Choice. Shirley A. Roe has been interviewed see it here:


Our prayers and sympathy to Richard O’Brien, publisher, Real Time Publishing on the recent illness of his wife. We wish her a speedy recovery and pray for strength for the family.

FEATURE: Evaluating a Novel’s Plot and Scenes

Part Two:By Frances Beckham

Insert Yourself In Each Chapter Scene————————————-
For each scene, put yourself in turn in the shoes of each
character. Live what they live. Feel the emotions of the
characters. Act out their parts. Imagine the scenes step by step in
your mind. Visualize them and let them play out like a movie with
you in it. Doing this helps a writer to see weaknesses in the
characters’ personalities, lack of focus on the plot, weakness in
the dialog, and the length of detail in the description. As you
envision the scenes in your mind, jot quick notes. Allow the scene
to play out in alternate ways from what you originally wrote.

Examine Each Scene Ending————————-
Scenes should end in a way to make the reader want to read more.
End a scene:

The moment a major decision is about to be made;
When a terrible incident happens;
When something bad is about to happen;
When a strong display of emotions happens;
When a question is raised with no immediate answer.

Enhance the Core—————-
The “core” relates to the purpose of the scene. After reading each
scene, ask yourself the following questions: What is the scene’s
purpose? Why does it exist? Determine whether the scenes are in
line with the plot. If the core is weak, strengthen it.

Adjust the Pace—————
Long, lagging scenes that require little action can be very boring.
To speed them up, use a plot-focused dialog. A short verbal
exchange leaves a lot of white space on the page and gives the
feeling that the story is moving. Sometimes, conversely, scenes
need to be slowed down. Do this by including action and
descriptions that are relevant to the plot and move it forward.

Cut or Strengthen Weak Scenes—————————–
Often it is hard for a writer to critique his/her own work. When
reading through the novel, one often does not see the weak scenes.

So when reviewing your book, ask the following questions for each

Is a character’s motivation undeveloped?
Is there too much introspection (characters examining their own
thoughts or feelings)?
Is there too little tension between characters?

If you answer “yes” to any of these questions, determine whether or
not the scene is necessary to the story. If it is necessary, redo
it. If not, cut it out.

By taking these steps to improving the plot and scenes in your
novel, you’ll see those puzzle pieces come together to form the
“big picture” you wanted in the first place!


Frances Beckham is a writer of children's and young adult fiction
and resides in Washington State. She operates the Affordable
Proofreading & Critique Service for writers of film scripts and
novels. Beckham enjoys writing, whether it is scripts, books, or
Copyright 2011 Frances Beckham


We love to hear of your success stories, submit them to us at:
Remember to post your book signing, guest speaker events on our Bookstore page. Simply send us an email with details of your events and we will be happy to post them. Just part of the Allbooks service to our authors.

Congratulations to Shirley A. Roe, Managing Editor of Allbooks Review Int. on the release of her sixth novel, Now My Life Begins. The book is available in print and ebook on and on her recent Bronze Award from Reader’s Choice for Dreams and Nightmares.

Allbooks Reviews INTERVIEW:
Please state your name and location. (city and State or Province, Country)
W. Ron Drynan. Sarasota, Florida, USA.

Tell us the title and publisher of your book:
Power Split – A Philosophical Thriller. Published by Artairus.

Tell us about yourself:
I’m a former systems analyst, project manager, and bank consultant turned voice-over guy, adventure tour guide, and author. I reside in beautiful Sarasota on Florida’s Suncoast with my exquisite wife and three fantastic rescue dogs. When I’m not making up stories, I’m playing on the water or in the woods.

When was the book released?:
May 25, 2011.

Give us an overview of your book.
Beyond the teaser from the book jacket, the story asks the reader to consider the ramifications of finding proof positive answers to the most important questions humanity has ever faced. How would people change their behavior and priorities? What would happen to us as a race? What would we do differently?

We start out following Leon Berger, a wildlife expert and extreme explorer through a series of excruciating and increasingly lengthy blackouts which baffle his doctors. The blackouts come at the worst possible times, such as underwater or on an ice climbing expedition. Concurrent with Leon’s blackouts, we follow Ryder Pelse as a test pilot on an experimental spacecraft capable of traveling further than we’ve ever gone. Ryder is blacking out in flight, which puts the mission in jeopardy.

When a mysterious man known only as Hanlon connects Ryder and Leon’s blackouts, he discovers the true potential of their situation. These men represent the opportunity for him to fulfill his life-long quest for The Answer. However, they will not submit to the testing Hanlon needs to prove his theory, and things escalate from there.

To avoid spoilers, I’ll just say that Hanlon goes to the most extreme lengths in pursuit of The Answer. Leon and his family, Ryder and the folks at Dax Space Corp., and many high-profile intellectuals are placed directly in harm’s way as Hanlon justifies finding The Answer by any and all means necessary.

What inspired you to write this book?
I wanted to answer the unanswerables for myself. For example, I describe myself as having been a rebellious atheist in my youth and a lazy agnostic as I got older. Upon realizing that I wanted to personally decide where I stand on what six billion people seem to accept as a given, doing the research for a novel seemed the best way to make the journey as enjoyable as possible. The added benefit is having a great story (if I do say so myself 😉 to share with other people who may or may not be positive in their convictions or their faith. When I started writing the book, I had no idea where I’d land with regard to the unanswerables. That was a big source of excitement fueling the process.

Another aspect of Power Split is the science contrasted with faith. There is some amazing research being done with regard to the physical seat of consciousness in the brain, commercial spaceflight and tourism, and the search to determine our place in the universe. What surprised me most was how generous and forthcoming so many solidly credentialed researchers were when I queried them about their work. Several were quite willing to share the details of their research and their own personal take on certain aspects of it, which I think adds tremendously to the story. I can’t thank them enough, but I hope the linked bibliography in the book will give them due credit and inspire some readers to delve more deeply into aspects of the story they find most intriguing.

How is your book different from other books in this genre?
I don’t think “philosophical thriller” is a recognized or standardized genre as of yet, but in the general world of thrillers, I think Power Split differs based on reader involvement. The idea was to present two primary philosophical issues for which there is no answer, create an action-packed story around finding the answers, and engage the reader in deciding where they stand and which characters they’re rooting for. Many people, myself included, get so busy with day-to-day life that they don’t spend much or any time pondering life’s biggest questions. I think that’s a shame. If I can entertain readers while making them consider or reconsider their personal take on major philosophical issues, then my job is well done.

Where can people buy your book?
Power Split is available as a paperback or eBook through all major retailers. Links are available on the book’s web-site at

Are you working on another book? If so when do you expect it to be published?
At present I’m working on marketing for this book, which is my debut novel. Soon I’ll start recording the audio book. Next comes the sequel, which I’m hoping to finish in the first quarter of 2012.

If you self published, what advice can you give to fellow writers?
First, in the words of Joe Konrath: “There’s a word for a writer who never gives up… published.” If you don’t know who Joe Konrath is then you haven’t been doing your homework. Second, if there’s anything anyone can say that’ll stop you from publishing your work, save yourself the trouble and take up ping pong instead. Reading is a completely personal and subjective thing, so there will always be plenty of people who don’t like your work. I believe there’s an audience for every story, and your job is to tell your story in the best way you can, then go find your audience.

If published traditionally, tell us how you benefited:

Can you share one of your marketing successes with us?
I’ve just recently released my debut novel, so the results haven’t come in. One facet of the marketing plan that has yielded good results so far is to start locally. For example, my wife wanted to throw a party for the book release, so we invited everyone in town we know. We didn’t sell the book at the party (that would be cheesy), it was just about having new and old friends over for wine and h’ors d’oeuvres, and discussing the brave new world of publishing.

It seems most people don’t know about POD or independent publishing of eBooks yet, so it’s a great opportunity to enlighten them. That might spark their own desire to publish or just get back into reading and discovering new authors. With all the subsequent linking via sites like Facebook and Twitter, I estimate about 5,000 people heard about Power Split for just the cost of the caterer.

Of course, only a small percentage of those folks are avid readers, and a small percentage of those are into philosophical thrillers. I’m hoping they’ll help pass along the link to their friends or acquaintances who might enjoy the book.

How did you find Allbooks Reviews and what are you hoping for in your relationship with us?
I found you Allbooks Reviews with a Google search. I’ll have a look at your advertising and other offerings.

Was the low cost a surprise? What other things would you like Allbooks Reviews to offer writers?
The cost was low enough that I didn’t feel like I was paying for a reviewer to read the book, I was just helping cover overhead. That was important to me, because I really wanted an objective review that hadn’t been purchased.

Thank you for this interview and best of luck with your book.
Thanks much, and best of luck to Allbooks Reviews as well.

One Response to “Allbooks Review September 2011 Newsletter”

  1. I definately have a book in my head – its based on people I know and individual personalities – so not thriller but one day I hope to write it.

    I doubt my ability to be a story teller but would like to have a go

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: